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Rachel (queenrachel) wrote in penandpaper,
@ 2003-10-20 21:22:00
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    Current mood:procrastinating

    I figured I should post something. ;) This is a poem I wrote last year... I'm not a poet but I think this turned out okay. Constructive criticism will earn you cookies!

    I was drowning, my lifeboat just a shard of broken dignity.
    I tried to reach for you, but you just stared-
    And when I'd almost reached the surface,
    You pushed me back underwater,
    Leaving me to drown.

    Somehow I survived,
    The ragged breath of solitude healing me more than it should have.
    I waited for an apology, but there was none,
    Only a cold stare of frigid disdain.

    Your animosity was like the clouds before a thunderstorm,
    Dark and gloomy, threatening to unleash fury at any moment,
    But yours was never unchained.

    Something I did made you feel remorse,
    The way it always happened.
    What was it this time? Was it when you saw me crying tears of ice?
    Or when I decided that I simply didn't care anymore,
    Leaving you alone in a crowded room.

    But after all that time, all that loathing,
    You're the one who's drowning now.
    You reach for me, and I see myself mirrored in your eyes,
    Through the hazy distortion of the water.
    I think of ignoring you, but where will that get me?
    Reoccurrences are our fates, so it seems.
    And so I extend a hand to you,
    Because I don't want to drown anymore.

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